[TOEFL writing] May 10, 2024 (4)

1.

While both Sam and Tanya raised some relevant points, I share Tanya's opinion that the government probably shouldn't tax unhealthy products.

 

Remember that our health depends on a lot of factors, so focusing entirely on our diets is counterproductive.

Remember that our health depends on a lot of factors, so focusing entirely on our diets is counterproductive.

 

The food we eat certainly impacts our health, but so does the amount of exercise we get.

The food we eat certainly impacts our health, but so does the amount of exercise we get.

 

Even if we eat junk good all the time, we can avoid burdening the health care system by exercising on a regular basis.

Even if we eat junk food all the time, we can avoid burdening  the health care system by exercising on a regular basis.

 

Therefore, I don't think it is fair to punish people just for what they eat.

Therefore, I don't think it is fair to punish people just for what they eat.

Therefore, I don't think it is fair to punish people just for what they eat.

 

Instead, the governments should focus on educating people about healthy habits in general.

Instead, the government should focus on educating people about healthy habits in general.

 

2.

In my opinion, it's probably a good idea to tax certain unhealthy products.

 

I strongly agree with Sam's idea that taxes on junk food can reduce the prevalence of serious health problems in society.

 

The government already spends an enormous amount of money treating people with such illnesses, but can't afford to do that forever.

The government already spends an enormous amount of money treating people with such illnesses, but can't afford to do that forever.

 

I read that the budget of our national health care system has increased by  20% in the last five years, which I found shocking.

I read that the budget of our national health care system has increased by 20% in the last five years, which I found shocking.

 

Tanya mentioned that people might turn to lower-quality products to save money, but she didn't mention that the government can prevent this by using the money from the tax to make healthy choices more affordable.

Tanya mentioned that people might turn to lower-quality products to save money, but she didn't mention that the government can prevent this by using the money from the tax to make healthy choices more afforable.

 

for example, they could subsidize products like fresh fruit and vegetables.

For example, they could subsidize products like fresh fruit and vegetables.